DeadParrot222 - Comment #472,274

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Fifths
Fifths

Hey DeadParrot, I decided to finally read your fic.

Two times before have I ever come close to shedding a tear over something mlp related. I can proudly say that Tiny Wings is the third to make my eyes water just a little =P Pretty damn good story.

If I might be so bold, I’d like to offer a criticism however. Your entire fourth chapter seemed rather gratuitous and unneccesary. I know you love Scootaloo and must have wanted to do something to make it up to her after bashing her so hard, but you really didn’t need to spend that much time hammering home how well off she was in the end. The third chapter does a balls-tighteningly fantastic job of wrapping up the story’s dramatic action and at this point the narrative is basically over and the audience is ready to go home, yet you force us to stick around, and frankly, it gets rather boring.

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