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I guess I’ll be a patron

Oct 24, 2013 at 05:45PM EDT

I’ll be a first time patron who appears and acts much younger than she is. She’s a 22 year old graphic designer and regular artist on the side. She’s here because her boss wanted to meet her here for something, but he’s refusing to show up. She enjoys drawing and always carries her sketchbooks and pencils around with her in case she gets bored, which is often.

Oct 24, 2013 at 05:49PM EDT


Fun Fact: Chippendales irl is a male strip bar. I suppose this doesn’t really matter (possibly a unisexual strip bar in this universe?) , but just let that be known if you want to be a stripper.

Oct 24, 2013 at 05:56PM EDT

Lil B wrote:


Fun Fact: Chippendales irl is a male strip bar. I suppose this doesn’t really matter (possibly a unisexual strip bar in this universe?) , but just let that be known if you want to be a stripper.

OP was already informed of my new character due to that obvious fact. #wink-wink-nudge-nudge

Oct 24, 2013 at 06:12PM EDT

slow night SHUGER T said while outside the club. that man looks cold thought SHUGER T left while taking sugar iced tea hey man need anything SHUGER T said “no” the stranger replied let me know if you need something replied SHUGER T while leaving

Last edited Oct 24, 2013 at 06:30PM EDT
Oct 24, 2013 at 06:30PM EDT

Chowz caught jace giving the sugar iced tea to the hobo.

Jace, what did I tell you about our policies regarding giving items to the homeless? You know it’s prohibited. Do it again, and you’re fired.

Oct 24, 2013 at 06:32PM EDT

Barry stood outside the club, constantly adjusting his Yankees cap. “Jesus, could somebody remind me why I took this job again? Nothing ever happens. I’d like it if something happened once in a while. I mean, really – oh, sorry, you can go in.” He took a break from his rambling to let a few more patrons inside. “Alright, now what was I talking about…? God dammit, can’t remember.”

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Oct 24, 2013 at 06:32PM EDT

My character will be a patron of the strip club so wonderfully named Pimp McChicken. He’s a pimp who likes chicken.

Oct 24, 2013 at 07:07PM EDT

walks into classy office space, where there’s a nice window view of the city and a large abstract painting of a dick

Ryan: The better part of this job.

He is a little giddy as he enters his room again, glad he can return to his baby. He’s lucky he rarely leaves, as accountants do, since his office is his so precious to him

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Oct 24, 2013 at 07:18PM EDT

now we get an problem SHUGER T said when he went inside “do yyyyou see annnn scray tre” ok you’re obviously too drunk SHUGER T replied while he pick up the drunken patron

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Oct 24, 2013 at 07:28PM EDT

Sitting in a corner angrily drawing various pictures of people being killed in varying manners and mumbling to self. Lovely, this is what she does when upset.
Stupid boss making me come here. This place is just so freaking awkward and everything and ugh.
More angry scribbling
Take that stupid person, you get to be killed via a fire. Hmph.

Oct 24, 2013 at 07:32PM EDT

MasterBurner, what are you doing? Stop drawing or else you’re fucking fired. Put on your outfit now.

Oct 24, 2013 at 07:59PM EDT

She stands up, glares at Chowz, and simply yells at him
She continues to seethe. She might have anger issues.

Oct 24, 2013 at 08:13PM EDT

Can we go home now Taur? It’s battlefield night, and my only day off.
Aw, come on! the shows about to start!
Carno sits back down, clutching his laptop bag close to his chest.
You disgust me.

Oct 24, 2013 at 08:22PM EDT

sitting down at a table, all alone
gets up, awkwardly shuffles to a table where people are sitting
Tries to socialize

“So, how’s that weather?”

Oct 24, 2013 at 08:36PM EDT

Are the doors locked?
Are the doors locked?!

What? Why?
I don’t like this feeling…

Oct 24, 2013 at 08:38PM EDT

I’ll be Kurt Foxwell, I’m a simple man who lives in the basement of the club. I clean up after everyones gone home. I get paid by being able to live in the basement, one meal a day, and some money for whatever expenses I have. I also get medical, which is nice.

I’m very quiet and keep to myself, usually staying in the basement during working hours, however I have been known to leave and come back every so often during working hours, but never stay in the club’s main floor for longer than it takes me to leave or head back to the basement.

Last edited Oct 24, 2013 at 08:40PM EDT
Oct 24, 2013 at 08:40PM EDT

As he begin working on the rare audit, I begin to hear the music.

Ryan: That’s weird. The music usually doesn’t play that loud.

He peers down and sees the usual. Boss yelling at pervs and strippers on the filamentous polls. I step down the stairs and join the crowd. He tries to go out but for some reason, it’s locked. This brings heavy nerves since he can’t talk to SHUGER T, who always has the best advice. He walks over to Chowz.

Ryan Hey boss, can you turn the volume down a little, I can’t get the audits done.
Chowz: What do you MEAN DOWN A LITTLE? It’s Perfect!
Ryan But boss…
Ryan /sigh/

Last edited Oct 24, 2013 at 08:54PM EDT
Oct 24, 2013 at 08:53PM EDT

Lil B wrote:

As he begin working on the rare audit, I begin to hear the music.

Ryan: That’s weird. The music usually doesn’t play that loud.

He peers down and sees the usual. Boss yelling at pervs and strippers on the filamentous polls. I step down the stairs and join the crowd. He tries to go out but for some reason, it’s locked. This brings heavy nerves since he can’t talk to SHUGER T, who always has the best advice. He walks over to Chowz.

Ryan Hey boss, can you turn the volume down a little, I can’t get the audits done.
Chowz: What do you MEAN DOWN A LITTLE? It’s Perfect!
Ryan But boss…
Ryan /sigh/

ok now a silent place I know is under the club SHUGER T said “no not under the bar if you go there we’ll fire you” chowz replied ok what about the private rooms they have no sound in there almost SHUGER T said “it’s fine shuger but thanks” ryan replied

Oct 24, 2013 at 09:17PM EDT

The music is getting too loud to handle. She digs in her bag and pulls out some earplugs and sticks them in her ears. They really help make the music tolerable.
Jesus, are these people trying to deafen everyone in town?

Oct 24, 2013 at 10:23PM EDT

Pat is backstage getting ready to perform. He hears his boss yelling at people, as usual.
“At least he’s not as bad as my last boss” Pat says to himself.
Shirt cuffs. Check
Bow tie. Check
Tear-off pants. Check
“IT’S PARTY PAT TIME!” Pat says as he walks on stage. The first thing he notices is a woman sitting alone in the corner.

I’ve never seen her in this club before, maybe this is her first time.

He looks closer and sees she’s drawing something.

She looks bored. A dance will cheer her up.

Pat walks over to her table and starts shaking his ass.

Last edited Oct 25, 2013 at 12:02AM EDT
Oct 24, 2013 at 11:53PM EDT

It’s show time everyone. Where’s the fucking drinks? People are fucking thirsty around here.

Oct 24, 2013 at 11:55PM EDT

Carno and Taur both share looks of shock on their faces. Carno then turns to Taur.
THIS is what you wanted?!?!
Nononononono oh God why! Let’s bail!
As they both rush to the exit, Carno pulls on the handle.
It’s locked! What now?
Easy. Don’t look and block out everything.
I hate you for this.

Oct 25, 2013 at 12:00AM EDT

I’ll be a patron that’s a former US Marine who loves to drink.
Name:???(his name is unknown, but people call him Bacon due to his size(lol phat) and his obsession with the food.)

Oct 25, 2013 at 12:08AM EDT

List of characters

Chippendales club staff:
chowzburgerz – Club Manager
Mike – Bartender
Dr. Robotnik – Part time Bartender
Digoxin – Bartender
jace is boss – Bouncer, “Shuger T”
Jimmy Lethal – Bouncer, “Barry Anderson”
A Ring Pop – Business Accountant, “Ryan Santos”

Male Strippers:
Disturbed Brony – Stripper, “Pat”
Blue Screen (of Death) – Stripper, “Blue”
Randomman – Stripper
Ann Hiro – Stripper

level4outbreak – Club patron / Drifter
CrustyClarinet – Club patron
CrouchingSloth – Club patron / Pimp, “Pimp McChicken”
Carno/Taur – Club patrons, “Taur” & “Carno”
MasterBurner – Club patron
CrowTheMagician – Club patron / Private investigator
Atraps – Club patron / US marine, “Bacon”
Weasel – Club patron

Captain Douglas J Falcon – Hobo
Who am I? – Basement dweller, “Kurt Foxwell”
Serious Business – Unofficial Bar Doorman

Dac – ?
IvanP91v – ?

Few people notice the locked doors. But most people are too drunk/enamoured to care

The music makes its first change giving the signal for the first strip.

Pat takes his queue and removes his tie seductively in front of a mysterious lady while shaking his ass.

Ann, however has somehow jumped the queue and already has his shirt off. But this is a strip club after all and little attention is paid towards this lapse in timing. The patrons of the club certainly don’t mind

While Pat and ANN work the poles, Blue is at the tables, going between seated patrons and offering lapdances.

While moving his hips and swinging his tie around, one extremely drunken and douchey patron starts taking several bright flash photo’s of him.

“Now thats a fiiine peice of ass right there!” The unruly patron declares

Blue maintains his composure and without breaking his dance, he points to the sign that clearly states “No photography” a rule thats pretty standard in strip clubs.

“Yea well whatever, who cares!?” The unruly patron declares as he continues taking photo’s

The bouncers SHUGAR T and Barry Anderson, begin to take notice of the loud, rule breaking troublemaker and move towards the intoxicated patron…

Last edited Oct 25, 2013 at 08:37AM EDT
Oct 25, 2013 at 12:28AM EDT

OOC: corrected mistakes. I didn’t realise Carnotaur was playing two characters at once.

Everyone else: please review the list and make sure I got it right

Oct 25, 2013 at 12:44AM EDT

I’m a patron here. I’m a Private investigator or at least that’s what most people know about me. In truth I only investigate cases that involve the occult and supernatural. Right now I’m currently here in the club cause a client, a former bartender here wants answers to the possibility if this joint is haunted.

OOC: sorry I was late, I woke up not feeling too well and I fell back asleep hoping that when I wake up again I’ll feel better.

Oct 25, 2013 at 12:58AM EDT

My character: Patron. A drifter that no one had seen prior to the night of the murder. Kept to himself the entire time and comes across as rather abrasive.

Oct 25, 2013 at 01:12AM EDT

RandomMan is a male stripper. Weasel is a young patron who is clinically insane and writes in a notebook.
Oh, and thank you very much for this list! It will make things a hell of a lot easier!

Immediately notices the club is full tonight.
Mark: God, it must be happy hour…
Notices the club music playing in the background, and kind of digs it.

Sits at a small table in front of the stage, and waits impatiently for a server to take her order. None take the effort to do so, and she groans in dissatisfaction.
Mark: Whatever… I’ll just go up to the bar then.
Pushes self away from table and approaches the bar. A bartender comes up, with headphones in their ears.
Mark: I’d like a Guinness, please.
The bartender ignores her, nodding his head back and forth.
Mark: Bloody hell…
She removes the bartender’s earphones, and he turns around.
Mark: Thank you! I’d like a…
She is yet again stopped by the bartender.
Mike: Don’t worry. I got ya covered.
He hands her two glasses of Jagermeister, She looks at him in frustration.
Mark: I asked for Guinness, not Jager.
Mike: First two of Jager are always on the house.
She shakes her head, and picks the two glasses up. She takes them back to her table, and downs one of them.
Mark: Who am I to say no to free drinks?
Gets more and more inebriated as the music booms in the night.

OOC: Before the next post, which will feature the first victim, I should explain some rules of the game.
1. BIC denotes when the real post relating to the story begins. OOC denotes me answering or explaining the mechanics of the game.
2. Blue writing will denote Mark’s narration. They will advance onto each murder as they happen.
3. Green writing denotes the murder scenes. They will describe each murder and how it happens. The murders and victims will be denoted in red, in case you don’t want to bother reading the scene. These will cause Mark to search for anything that could point to the killer, so you aren’t totally clueless.
4. If I’m forgetting anything else, or you are confused, just post OOC, and then your question or response.
5. Good luck!

Last edited Oct 25, 2013 at 07:12AM EDT
Oct 25, 2013 at 07:06AM EDT

OOC: Updated list.

Also forgot the bio:

Blue is a 26 year old university graduate who studied philosophy and liberal arts. Unfortunately there’s no market demand for those qualifications so here is getting dollar bill stuffed down his leotards instead. But an optimist at heart, he looks on the positive side of his job. He performs with vigor, enjoying the attention of the public…that is, when not reminded of his bitter crushed dreams

Also strippers, we need better stripper names. I took the liberty of calculating some suggestions

BSOD = Thunder Down Under
Disturbed Brony = Trey Andy
Random man = Randy Sex Machine
Ann hiro = Mean Dean

Oct 25, 2013 at 08:54AM EDT

Bit late for a character bios, but here goes.

Ivo Robotnik is (apparently) a part-time bartender at Chippendales. He is a middle-aged man whose egg-shaped body has earned him the nickname “Eggman” by the staff and some of the more regular patrons.

It is unknown what Dr. Eggman does in his spare time or why he works here, but it is clear that Ivo takes zero interest in the “proceedings,” and is only here to earn some extra cash along with the money he earns from doing who-knows-what.

Last edited Oct 25, 2013 at 09:22AM EDT
Oct 25, 2013 at 09:19AM EDT

I’m currently sitting at the counter, looking down at it with my left hand covering half of my face, while my right hand is just spinning a empty glass. Before I came here I looked at the Chippendales history, to see if it’s history of the place can have a reason for a haunting to even manifest. Needless to say, It does.

Why am I not surprise that this place would have a “colorful” history.

I noticed an egg shaped bartender cleaning one of the glasses and I decide to finally began the first part of my investigation

Well it’s now or never, Hey barkeep!

The bartender, miraculously hearing my voice through the loud music turn to my direction.

Dr. Robotnik: So what do you want, a refill.

I stop spinning my glass to realize that it is indeed empty and that I wasn’t spinning a halve full glass like I thought

Well not quite, I know this is going to really strange but humor me for a bit. In all the times you have worked here have you ever noticed incidents that you would register as being strange, unusual, possibly otherworldly to yea?

Last edited Oct 25, 2013 at 10:26AM EDT
Oct 25, 2013 at 10:24AM EDT

Character info:

Ill be a bar patron, a 22 year old guy, who does almost nothing but sit somewhere in the bar and drink whiskey. Im truly useless.

Oct 25, 2013 at 10:56AM EDT

OOC: Shit I didn’t realize that I forgot to put sound between to and really, damn.

Last edited Oct 25, 2013 at 11:35AM EDT
Oct 25, 2013 at 11:34AM EDT

What she thinks as she drearily gazes at the two empty glasses in front of her.
Mark: Where… where’s the… where’s the bathroom?
She asks aloud, looking around the stage, dazed. She gets up, and looks around for a sign leading her to the bathroom.
Mark: Um… let’s see… that one? No, that says… that says… Eh-scah-pey.

Mark: Maybe that one! No wait… that’s… that’s… I have no idea…

Finally finds the right sign.
Mark: Aha! Found you…

>stumbles out of table
>holds arms out to sides to balance herself

>slowly but surely makes her way into bathroom
>enters… and hears screams from inside the bathroom she enters
>she looks confused, and turns to the urinals…
>wait, urinals?
>wrong bathroom
>heads into ladies restroom
>approaches farthest stall
>opens door…

>And finds Dac, face down inside the toilet
>Mark shrugs drunkenly, and moves his dead body away to take a piss
>23 remain

Mark finishes, turns to Dac’s corpse.
Mark: Excuse me… hic… can you hand me a paper towel?

Oct 25, 2013 at 12:30PM EDT

Chowz walked into the bathroom and saw the body.

Holy shit! A dead body! Wait, who the fuck is this asshole?

Oct 25, 2013 at 12:34PM EDT

Digoxin noticed Chowz running out of the bathroom, and detective Mark trying to stand up, but failing miserably.
Hey Mike, I think something’s going on over there.
Mike doesn’t hear Digoxin.
Digoxin runs up to the bathroom, and finds Dac on the floor.
Miss detective, is he dead?
*Yup. Why did Chowz walk into the Ladies Bathroom?"

Oct 25, 2013 at 12:58PM EDT

Let’s simply call him “the doorman”. He does not speak.

The doorman looks into the club, noticing all the commotion. He is trying to get inside, but why? Is he curious about the shouting? Does he want to be included in the goings-on? In any case, the door is locked, and he is locked outside.

Oct 25, 2013 at 03:02PM EDT

and out of here SHUGER T said while he uses an exit to throw unruly patron here are my keys just hold on to them SHUGER T “what the fuck is going on” Chowz said ok who’s…..oh shit SHUGER T said and ran to find the creepy tim burton man who always hang out at the doorways

Oct 25, 2013 at 03:17PM EDT

Well since we don’t know who this guy is, we should not care for now. Hell, he’s the only guy that did not introduce himself.

Oct 25, 2013 at 03:42PM EDT

Ugh, I gotta take a piss. Yo, Shuger, y’alright with doing double duty for a few minutes? Before Shuger can answer, Barry goes inside the club and makes his way towards the bathroom, shielding his eyes from the male strippers. Why couldn’t I be a security guard at Yankee Stadium or something? This gig sucks.

Barry walks into the bathroom and walks over to the deluxe handicapped stall. When he opens the door to it, he begins to notice a horrid smell, like shit and rotting flesh mixed together. Looking down, he sees a dead body lying face-first in the toilet. DUDE!

Oct 25, 2013 at 04:38PM EDT

With all the commotion, The old man sneaks into the strip club through the conveniently open door that Shuger T left open. He promptly goes to the bathroom and spots the dead body.
?: Oh, oh god no…
Suddenly, he goes in a trance-like state.
?: my name is Joseph Crescent. I served in the Vietnam war for the entirety of the war.
Joseph comes out of the trance, and walks up to the people in the bathroom.
Joseph: Sorry about that. It’s a little thing I have, whenever I see a dead body, I’m forced to talk about my past. Either way, I think I should get a shave.
Joseph pulls out a straight razor and begins shaving the beard off his face.

Oct 25, 2013 at 05:11PM EDT

Not hearing the commotion in the bathroom over his music, Mike is still bringing drinks to the customers. When he sees it’s rather busy by the bathroom, he decides to check it out, and sees Dac’s body. Never seen something like this before, his eyes go wide, and he turns pale
What happened here?

Oct 25, 2013 at 05:15PM EDT

OOC: to avoid confusion, I’ll just talk without a color
Tons of commotion coming from the staff in the bathroom, so Ryan rushes to Chowz to see what happened

Ryan: Boss, what happened?
Chowz: A man died in the bathroom!
Ryan: Shit…
Chowz: We don’t know who he is, he seems to have snuck in and die.
Ryan: Are the cops here?
Chowz: There’s a woman here who seems to have a badge, but she’s too drunk to help us now.

Ryan nervously looks around. Everyone is frantic. He catches the hobo who he gave 10 dollars to earlier.

Oct 25, 2013 at 05:59PM EDT

Barry shot a confused look at Joseph. Uh… okay. He then looks over at Mike. Hey, buddy? Yo. Uh… why are you all pale?

Shrugging it off, Barry knelt down to get a closer look at the dead body. Well, from what I can see… this brother was strangled.

Oct 25, 2013 at 06:15PM EDT

She somehow hears the commotion going on and pushes Pat out of her way to go and see what’s going on. As soon as she spots the corpse, she goes through a mixture of emotions, ending with morbid fascination. She quickly sketches the scene in gruesome detail.
Whatever happened, that guy’s dead. Wonder what caused the murderer to kill him.

Last edited Oct 25, 2013 at 06:29PM EDT
Oct 25, 2013 at 06:28PM EDT

But exactly when was he murdered?

Oct 25, 2013 at 07:09PM EDT

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