I just saw that Scratch animation now.
It was pretty good. The VA was good as well but I always imagined Scratch to have a more raspy voice like you said.
And I am actually busy :)
@justaguyonthenternet:
Thank you for your kind words.
@Owens the Deranged:
I wasn't planning on continuing the story. The original ending was a downer. The commander ends the chapter with "When will you join us ponies? We can't protect you much longer" and shows that humanity is losing a war against an Alien Empire. New orders come from the brass which basically state "No reinforcements incoming. Fight to the last shell and the last man". He knows that High command is withdrawing all protection of non-space travelling species to focus on defending mankind's colonies.
The commander takes matters into his own hands and devises one final "charge of the light brigade" against the enemy. His plan is to lower the enemy into Equestria's gravity well and kill all them by overloading the nuclear fusion engines on his own ships, sacrificing himself and his navy to create a "Kessler Syndrome" ring of debris around Equestria, protecting that planet from space for at least a century.
With the help of a fellow pony loving engineer, the commander has jury rigged an escape pod to be able to enter the atmosphere but unlikely to survive. When the Engineer discovers that the Commander is attempting to give ponies weapons and space technology, he objects saying that this would destroy their innocence and violate the Prime Directive far too much.
In the ensuing fight, the engineer is killed and the Commander makes it to Ponyville, but of course, he is dying. Everyone is afraid of him but he manages to raise his hand towards Twilight, she understands the feeling from the tower and raises her hoof to his hands. He directs her that the escape pod has all the info she needs (as well as many video and text logs addressed to her from him) and his final words are:
"I'm so sorry….we tried so hard….we fought so hard…."
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I didn't like that downer ending so I just went with a happy one where the commander represents us bronies: He wakes up, works and then watches ponies all day.
But….I have an idea for a second chapter. Let it stew in my head for a while and I'll get back to you.